Have a read of students’ beautiful remembrance themed poems to commemorate ANZAC Day.
Have a read of our wonderful picture books that students made for their buddies this term.
This term we’ve been learning how to use tightening tension in our writing to keep the reader on the edge of their seat. We watched this fantastic example from BBC Earth and students created their own piece of writing to describe it. Have a read of them in the clip below.
The OC had a fantastic time on Friday attending the Newcastle Writer’s Festival. We enjoyed a session with author, Tristan Bancks, who spoke about his inspiration and writing process. In the afternoon we took part in writing workshops. Year 5 worked with local writer, Jess Black and Year 6 worked with Paul Russell. We also enjoyed visiting the amazing book shop! Thanks for a great day OC and thanks to Mrs Derricott for coming along with us.
Students were given the challenge to write a sizzling start using the image below as their prompt. We voted for the best 5 which will be displayed on our school writing wall in the downstairs foyer. Enjoy!
My feet crunch along the sandy ground as I make my way towards the deep-blue carpet of water in front of me. In the distance, a barge floats weightlessly along the water, two ferries at its side. I sigh as I watch it slowly crawl its way along, its monotonous journey as gradual as ever. I come here sometimes, to remember her, how much she loved the ocean. At times I think about that moment, what I could have done, how I could have helped her. But, I know, there was nothing either of us could have done to prevent that dreadful day…
“How do you lose a boat?” I exclaimed, throwing my hands up in frustration.
“It was a small boat,” he mumbled sheepishly, tugging on the drawstrings of his raincoat.
“Yeah, but a boat!”
The waves towered ominously above our heads before crashing down onto the rocks and spraying our faces with salty water. We were surrounded by the ocean, and the rocky crevices of the island did little to protect us from the rain.
“When we get back I’ll buy you a new boat,” he offered.
“It won’t be the same as Jessie!” I sobbed.
“You named your boat?!” He turned to face me cautiously.
“Don’t judge me! It was a good boat!”
The three of us sat on the rocks, eyes closed, channelling our power into the waves. The black clouds overhead let loose a barrage of cannonball-sized raindrops that splattered against our already soaked bodies, making concentration nearly impossible. But despite our situation, we all felt the surge of core power, the water’s energy surging through us all. A battle of steel and magic raged behind us, the noise drowned out by the hum of our power. Then, without warning, a tidal wave burst from the depths and engulfed the island, drowning all those who were not protected by a charm. When the last puddle had ran back into the sea, we heard cheering. The soldiers were celebrating. They thought they had won the battle. How little they knew.
The soggy wood felt brittle and old under my feet as I trudged along the deck of our sad little fishing boat. Another wave rocked the vessel and my hand flashed like lightning onto the rusty handrail which bent and snapped under my weight. My hand scraped along the wet floor as I plunged into the dark depths below. My head throbbed as I painfully opened my eyes. “Where am I?” I muttered.
“Do you think he’ll be found?”
Mum turned to me look at me, her face a mixture of sorrow and sympathy. Her long butterscotch hair was contained and tucked safely away from the wind by her luminescent yellow hood of her raincoat.
“Probably not, honey,” she replies in gentle tones.
“I was talking to Sammy, Mum.”
I turn to my older brother, but I’m greeted with empty space, harsh waves, and jagged rocks covered with wooden planks from the boat we loaned from the lab. It had smashed through the towering waves and on to the rocks, before collapsing into a thousand pieces on to the rocky mound of land.
“Sammy?!” I called out, but my voice was swallowed by the sound of the crashing waves. He had been stolen by the ocean, swallowed, just like many before him.
This week we’re looking at how we can use the 5 senses to make our writing more descriptive and engaging. Using the image below as your stimulus, write a paragraph (or a whole story if you’re feeling enthusiastic) that evokes the senses! Good luck – can’t wait to read them.
This term we’ve been learning how to engage the reader by using a sizzling start followed by backfill in our imaginative writing. Today students worked collaboratively in groups to create some writing using picture prompts. Have a read of their fantastic efforts below.
Trigger – by Chelsea, Edie, Amira, Mika, Luisa and Emma
My fingers flew across the game controller, punching the animated characters on the screen. Today was the Interschool Gamer’s Championships and all I had to do was beat the opposition and have my dream or fail and crumple into a heap of dirt. No pressure, right? My palms dripped with sweat as my imaginary enemies fell before me, grimacing realistically as they lost their lives. I got lost in the game… literally. My arms and legs slowly disappeared before my eyes. I let out a terrified scream and scrambled away from the game, but it was no use. My finger grabbed the trigger one last time before I was swallowed by the game… Stuck in the game with nowhere to go, I was trapped. My enemy advances towards me and this time I have no trigger to push.
The Ransom Note by Emma, Mika, Luisa, Amira, Edie and Chelsea
The white glove enveloped his face like it was a mere handball. I watched his eyes slowly droop lower and lower, descending into the darkness that is unconsciousness. He woke up in a white room, beeping machines all around him; he tried to move but he couldn’t… I watched from above. I stared silently at him from my hiding place in the ceiling. Suddenly the manhole cover snapped, rust descending into the room. ‘Stop, that’s me!’ I yell as the little boy, me, is buried under all the debris. The boy muffles a scream. Silence. Soon, his family will receive the ransom note, the one that is pointless now that he is gone.
A Random Story by Edie, Emma, Luisa, Amira, Mika and Chelsea
The vast beach made a perfect background to promote the new Nike shoe. My camera clicked as I snapped picture after picture, checking each one after I took it. Even though the shoes looked dull, this was the fate of my job. I snapped picture after picture, but none of them seemed quite right. My camera soon ran out of film. Will my boss notice the lack of skill and quality? I sincerely hope not. I decide to angle the camera differently. Perfect! I’d never wanted to be a photographer, I wanted to be a chemist. But the universe would choose otherwise. I should quit my job!
Sneaky Sneakers By Rowan, Callum, Oliver & Henry
I look down upon the lone shoes and swallow hard. He was here. I grab the shoes and run. I hear explosions. I can’t decide whether I should run and try to save the innocent people or run to the safety of my home? I should probably mention, I have recently encountered alien life.
Empty by Mika, Edie, Amira, Luisa, Emma and Chelsea
My breath hitched as I surveyed the scene before me. The school bus that had just been bustling with students was now entirely empty. And on the day of the school trip to San Diego! I rushed up front to the bus driver. “Where is everybody?” I look at him, his shirt is covered in blood. His eyes are completely white and his head lolls back. Gunshot wound. I start hyperventilating, panic seeping into my thoughts, my brain, until all I see is my best friend, the one that would be here right now if it weren’t for the incident. I felt panic surge inside of me, my hands shaking violently. I bolt from the bus and run as my anxiety drains away. I feel nothing. Empty.
Congratulations to all our students who took part in the November writing challenge – NaNoWriMo. It was great to see so many students keen to take part and embark on writing a novel! Well done to everyone who reached their word count goal. Even though it’s now December, you can still keep writing!
Thank you to all the families who joined us for our assembly last week. Students shared their Australian Flash Fiction challenges, where they had just 50 words to create a story about anything to do with Australia.
Click on the images below to have a read.
To celebrate Halloween, we continued the OC tradition of writing some 2 sentence horror stories.
CAUTION: Don’t read before bedtime.
My mother always serves up a strange meat for dinner. It tasted good until I discovered what it was. – Jules
I went to my friend’s house for dinner and waited for the main course. It was me! – Ember
I smiled at the sound of the familiar tick-tock of my grandfather’s only-working watch. My smile faded as I remembered that the watch was buried with him. – Emma
I set the ringtone on my phone to the sound of screaming for Halloween. I heard it ring, but then realised with horror my phone was switched off. – Chelsea
It’s midnight, I’m tired and about to fall over as I lean against a tall pole. However, I realise this pole has arms and is staring at me. – Eliza
My mum never told me how my dad died. But I saw how my sister died. – Eleanor
I used to think clowns were funny. That was until one appeared in my closet. – Jules
I don’t want to do it, it just happens. I love the look on people’s faces as they die and so does my doll. She told me to do it. – Celeste
I went to take a look, just in case I hadn’t imagined it. My eyes never closed again. – Emma
There’s a knife on your bed but you don’t worry. Until it’s in your head. – Blade
I fell over and grazed my knee. I was about to get up, but something was holding me down. – Griffin
“There’s nothing under your bed, go back to sleep!” “He’s behind you now.” – Amie
A noise behind me, I turn. It was nothing, I try to reassure myself. Again it rings out. I turn my face frozen in shock, it’s finally found me. – William
My mum walks into my room and says ‘look behind you’. It is only now that I regret falling for her trick. – Oscar
At first I thought the knocking was coming from my window. Then it came again, but from the mirror. – Layla
I hear a soft singing coming from the room next to me. My roommate passed away two years ago. – Mika
My favourite toy is a knife. My favourite colour is red. – Ember
My mother always told me to be nice to strangers. Now I’m having a friendly conversation with the stranger from my closet who’s holding a knife. – Noah K
I made my little brother a paper boat. He was never seen again. – Ty
I reach for the covers of the bed. Then realise that I’m not in my room. – Fin
I was sitting on my bed one night, waiting for my parents to say goodnight. But they never came. – Dexter
I carefully placed a flower in front of my wife’s grave. ”Is that for me?” someone says behind me. – Chloe
I reached for the lamp in the dusty bedroom. Someone had already done it for me. – Fin
I used to love watching werewolf movies. I stopped when I heard howling next door. – Jules
I wake up in the dark with an unsettling feeling that someone is watching me and realise with horror that I am not where I went to sleep. I stand and walk towards a disturbing rustling noise and suddenly hear a piercing shriek and feel an excruciating pain vibrating through my body as I flop to the ground. – Raquel
I saw my favourite colour once in a dream, it’s red. I woke up the next morning to see it splattered all over my bedroom floor. Lying amongst it was my father’s body, the front door slammed shut. – Ellen
I usually sleep alone. Now someone sleeps next to me. – Liana
My brother hates chess but tonight he decided to play with me. Every time I took a piece, he winced and another cut appeared on his face. I won the game. – William
My mum is very secretive about her job. Last night I discovered she’s a serial killer. – Ember
I smile at the familiar teacher, writing up tomorrow’s lesson on the board. He’s the teacher who never seems to grow tired of his job, even after he’s been buried in the ground. for years. – Emma
My Mum just finished washing the dishes. So why are the knives dripping with blood? – Mika
I knocked on the glass. My reflection merely blinked at me. – Layla